I have thought long and hard about my story and I feel I have finally nailed it down.
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1. A piece of charcoal flies over a pad of paper in arcs and curves. (ECU)
2. Pages are ripped off repeatedly in frustration and are tossed to the ground; the pages begin to form a circle around the unknown artist. (CU to MS)
3. We see this character’s face for the first time. It is a girl, she is now looking frustrated and overwhelmed by the paper around her and her clear difficulty with drawing. (View behind easel and of face CU)
4. We look at the circle of papers strewn about her feet. We begin to spin. (Girl’s P.O.V.)
5. Reaction Shot: Girl’s face shows frustration, terror/horror and abject humiliation. The speed of the spinning increases.
6. The circle becomes like a laughing audience. (Girl’s P.O.V.)
7. The spinning is interrupted but the rustling of papers behind her. (MS)
8. (Quick Zoom In) Girl whips her head around to look over her shoulder toward the sound.
9. There’s a flashing of eyes in the forest amongst the papers. (Girl cropped MS deer cropped LS)
10. Reaction Shot: Girl’s face transforms from fear and frustration to interest and a hint reverence. Antlers begin to sprout from her head with a flicker. (Nubs) (CU)
11. Girl looks about herself at the circle around her feet. (CU)
12. Pull back to show circle and twisting of body and feet. (MS)
13. Back up to include girl‘s face, she looks back to the deer who bounds off. (MS/LS)
14. Reaction Shot: Determination spreads across the girl’s face. (CU)
15. Side View of girl’s face as she steps; defiant. (More flickering from her antlers and more growing)
16. Girl’s foot steps out of the circle. (CU)
17. Girl begins to chase the deer. (Antlers continue to grow). (Varied Shots)
18. Girl chases deer through the “forest.” Stacks of papers wobble and fall. We hear heavy breathing, the sound of the two running and the loose leaflets under their feet. (LS)
19. The chase slows, the deer allows the girl to approach. (LS to MS)
20. The girl reaches out to touch the deer. (MS)
21. The girl’s hand gently grazes the deer’s fur. (CU)
22. Cut back to (MS) so that we can see her antlers grow again.
23. Deer pricks its ears; the sound of another can be heard running through the forest. The sound comes from the (L) It is a hunter. (MS)
24. Deer bounds off. (MS)
25. Girl looks towards where the sound is heard. Girl looks back, frantically, in the direction of the deer. (CU)
26. The other passes by, it is a hunter; the hunter looks just like the girl but carries a knife that catches the light. (MS)
27. (Back and Forth) Moment where girl watches herself go after the deer, she is clearly puzzled and a bit scared. (MS)
28. Girl takes off after deer and hunter (I.e. herself). (MS)
29. Girl runs through forest, terrified. Piles are knocked down in a hail of white. Girl tries to keep up but ultimately looses the hunter. (Varied Shots)
30. Girl enters a clearing, huffing. She bends down and braces her hands on her knees but cannot rest as she soon catches the scene before her. (MS)
31. (Quick Zoom In) The deer lays dead in a beam of light that filters through the stacks of paper around the clearing. The deer is eviscerated. (Body Fills Most of Frame)
32. Girl approaches deer and falls to her knees beside the deer’s body. (Her antlers shed.) (MS/LS)
33. Girl runs an open palm over the pool of blood to a few, scattered, gold coins. She fingers the bloody coins then places them back in the gore. (CU to MS)
34. Girl next notices a broken mirror. She reaches down into the pool of blood again and grabs a shard, wipes it once and then raises the shard toward her face so that she might see her reflection. She can barely see herself. (MS to CU)
35. Over the Shoulder: We barely see her face through the blood on the mirror as she hangs her head to cry. (MS/CU)
36. Light begins to flicker before her. Girl begins to raise her head. (MS/CU)
37. Cut To: Deer as it begins to rise again; a brilliant light glows from its new spirit form. (MS)
38. Reaction Shot: Girl is taken aback. (MS)
39. Deer rears back its head and juts out its chest in a show of pride, strength and greatness. (Body Fill Frame then Zoom in to MS; Worm’s Eye View)
40. Reaction Shot: A smile spreads across the girl’s now illuminated face which is still wet with tears. (She begins to grow antlers again). (CU)
Montage:
41. Girl carries deer’s body back to original spot. (MS)
42. Girl stretches the deer’s skin to make a vellum canvas. (Varied Shots)
43. We see the girl from behind her easel, she has great antler. She is putting the finishing touches on a drawing; she is smiling. (MS)
44. View of the drawing; the girl has drawn the deer just as it looked when it rose again. (CU)
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